Post 9 Thinking about my Rough Draft

After reading the our book a little bit I got to thinking about the paper we have due on Thursday. I have a very strong topic I believe yet I still am uncertain about the quality of my thesis or if it is even a good thesis at that. My goal is to convince you, or whomever is going to read my paper, that for while computers and the internet are still new that they are critical to our success and prosperity. I have read much on both computers and the internet. Some things have been new to me and some of my own thoughts have been reconfirmed. The internet was developed by the military and schools for use as an easier way to communicate quickly over long distances. Computers have given us alternatives to many of our old machines of the past. Now in 2010 our cell phones, palm pilots, laptops, and even our cars can access the internet. One point in particular I want to stress is how both of these tools have given us the ability to always stay connected. Even when we are on another continent we can be somewhere else. I guess I should look into possibly focusing my thesis more on how we are changing the way we connect with others.